About half a year ago, I destroyed everything I wrote before I took on the challenge of trying to write a novel. I don't regret it one bit. Everything before that was absolutely terrible, and the only thing keeping me from disposing of the electronic copies of the novel is my belief that I can rewrite it and complete it. Indeed, I'm going to begin again within the next couple of weeks, and I'd probably appreciate some commentary on it.

But back to the topic at hand. I don't consider myself a particularly good writer. I enjoy writing, as anyone who's read my reviews or articles will have figured out, and I do consider myself a decent reviewer at this point, but in general, I don't have much regard for what I write. My non-fiction articles are pedantic and over-detailed, and my fiction is just terrible. I set out to write things like this:

but most often end up writing like this:

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2267722/1/The_Fall_An_IMA_Story

But at least I've improved a lot. My reviews have improved vastly, and even my fiction has become far superior to what I wrote back before I started my novel. I want to be a good writer, but I'm definitely not there yet.

(Those two pieces of fiction are mine, and The Fall is currently on its third draft.)

I have been writing a book for a while now. I free-write it. some-no, a lot- of methods my teachers have made us use (charts, outlines, all that bullshit) I do not use and I think is useless.

I've always loved to write, very much. Ever since I was very little I wrote tiny stories with some fantastic element, ALWAYS.
Looking back at it, it was terrible: it had very little cohesion between paragraphs and the story unfolded far too quickly when it should've been developed far more.

Now I'm rather happy with my writing; I haven't written anything in a while, but this is the last thing I've written (posting the link, so it doesn't take up too much space. Any critique is welcome ^^)

http://clashero.deviantart.com/art/Alamut-revised-94362690

I posted this in the artist thread a long time ago, but I think it's good enough to warrant a second posting.

*sighs* When I look back at my old writing, I realize that my grammar and vocabulary may have evolved, but my creativity and dedication went totally down the drain.

In grade 7 I wrote a 12 page story on Word in size 10 with Times New Roman. Today? I can barely write more than a paragraph or two before I get bored and stop. It makes me depressed.

edit: I am speaking of creative writing here, I'm decent with essays and the such but my heart's always been, and probably always will be, with fiction.

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

It's the exact same thing here, man. I moved to a new school my 7th grade year, and now in highschool the kids at this school still don't understand there is a difference. The English teachers aren't doing anything about it, either.

Oh, Missouri. How I long to escape you.

University kinda killed my creativity. I've been trying to get back into writing, but so far I've been unable to get back into it with any fervor. I do scribble down the occasional story idea, but often my prose work is limited to descriptive text for some of my roleplays. I've also got a Comic project in the works, starring the character I've taken my nickname from.

Oh yeah, I also wrote a 1 Act play for a Creative Writing Class a few years ago which I shall repost.

I've also written some great papers on Historical topics, but those are looooong and probably dry, so I probably won't post any of those unless anyone specifically wants to read my academic work.

Some people mentioned only being able to write when forced to, by a class assignment or whatever. My problem is that I can only write creatively when I am supposed to be doing other work, like my MA thesis or a dull-ass reference guide (I'm a technical writer).

I also wrote two plays in university, but was only able to finish them after I had cast all the characters and had the crew breathing down my neck to get the ending done so they could start memorizing lines and blocking scenes.

If I was ever an 'author' (i.e. writing was my full-time job), I would never write a single thing.

At one point in my career, I had to do a lot of documentation (very boring stuff on the surface) and I developed a huge appreciation for being concise while trying to remain interesting. Technical writing is an art form as well.

The one thing that irks me the most is repetitive words (especially combinations of) within the exact same paragraph or page. I see this a lot in people's early works in creative writing. Sometimes a thesaurus can solve the problem, but usually that specific detail isn't even necessary to repeat.

That said, my mother still has an early elementary school story that I wrote... and the entire thing is one run-on sentence. Apparently, I had a nifty idea of using the phrase "and then", instead of a period. ;-)

Novajam:

mark_n_b:

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

-snip-
when do you use its and when do you use it's (or should I say "when does one"?)
-snip-

I'd like that to be cleared up for me as well. I currently use "it's" as a shortened way of writing "it is," or when making a noun belong (eg. It picked up it's apple), however I'm not so certain that I'm using it properly.

Whenever you use it's, read it as "it is", and you'll be able to figure it out. When making something belong to "it", just use "its", as otherwise you'll be confusing it with "it is". "It" is that one exception where you don't use an apostrophe to designate possession.

I do my best writing when I haven't slept for a couple of days (Yay, insomnia), a few hours before it's due or when I'm angry/depressed about something. Up to a few years ago I was an awful writer, I could barely scrape 60's on my writing assignments for school. But then I found and interest in poetry.

I was given a small collection of Edgar Allen Poe's work by my mother and I loved every poem in it (Particularly 'Annabelle Lee') so I began reading the work of other writer's like Robert Frost. After I while I decided to write my own poetry, it started off rather basic and it wasn't too great in my opinion. But over time I got better at it, and my ability to write essays and prose got better as well, though I'm still not too experienced with prose.

Now I think I'm a pretty good writer, as I usually manage A's in any sort of writing class, and at the moment I'm majoring in English, though that could change at some point.

Sylocat:
The third best time, of course, is when I have something else I really should be doing instead.

Yes, there's nothing that make the dedicated concentration of writing look like fun better than something that's even more unpleasant and undesirable. One of the primary reasons I hate being unemployed is that I get enormous amounts of work done on my novel when I'm on lunch or I've completed my tasks and don't really want to go find something else to do.

The more seriously I write, though, the more important I find it is to have an outline and have thought through your ideas before you sit down to write. You can toss off something that gets the job done at 3 am, but you can also put that bumper back on your car with duct tape.

It doesn't have to be a hardcore outline--in fact, the more time you spend organizing your thoughts, the simpler the outline can be.

I really recommend reading The Art of Fiction and The Art of Non-Fiction by Ayn Rand if you're serious about your writing--not just about doing it, but about understanding it so you know how to keep improving.

Creative writing is my passion. However, essays are not my forte. I usually save my old essays just to prove to myself that I am becoming better. My first "book" was a horrid fantasy novel that was so cliche and trite that I only keep it to laugh at myself. Nowadays, I write horror, (gore with a hidden purpose, basically), and life experiences that I have yet to experience. Poetry's okay, I guess...

Damn, how I love writing.

I've been writing since junior high, and I thoroughly enjoy it. Yes, my junior high stories sucked majorly, but that's because, like all of us, I was a kid and didn't know any better at the time.

Now, I write a lot in my spare time. Most of it's fan fiction and short stories that I keep for my own amusement, yes, but I've had a few ideas spark into my head every once in a while. Most notably are the two I'm working on currently. One's a Star Fox fanfic that's getting its third rewrite this year, and the other is an original story that's not quite short enough to be a short story and not quite long enough to be a novel (Isn't that called a novella?). I'm not at my writing computer at the moment, but I'll post a sample from the either here in a while, most likely a bit from the middle.

EDIT:

xitel:
I have found that I do all my best writing a) without any pre-planning, and b) at 2:00 AM the day it's due.

Good god, I'm not the only one. Back in High School, I wrote my Junior Thesis at exactly 3AM on the day it was due. It got a 99, and that was only because I forgot to add something to to bibliography.

mark_n_b:

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

Thank you, that one really irritates me to no perceivable end.

Here's one a lot of people have trouble with (oh I just used it!): a lot versus allot versus alot (which is not an actual word so please don't use it)

when do you use its and when do you use it's (or should I say "when does one"?)

Grammer vs. Grammar (that's one I've seen messed up repeatedly on these forums over the past three days)

Small things that only bother me because they are sooooo easy to remedy and such simple things to learn that are so frequently messed up usually multiple times in a single sentence. And, yes, it is the 16 and under crowd who is guilty of it most of the time.

It's good to revisit old writing material to see how you've improved and see how silly it looks to not grasp and use basic linguistic concepts, it is usually the point when people dawn on why things like grammar and spelling do matter.

Well I was always taught to write it "a lot." So that's how I do it. I would use it to say that there are...well a lot of something.
Sixteen and under doesn't really excuse the people in my college english class.

That was hilarious. It's always Lupus.

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

Where the Hell have you gone to school?

And here is something that I wrote in like, 45 minutes or something, I've been consistently writing creatively (if you can call this creative) for about a year and a half now, and I have definitely gotten better. Here's something I've decided to post, and I know it's hellacious, but keep in mind, I'm 14.

I've recently fallen deeply and foolishly in love with limited omniscient narrative perspective writing, after reading Call of Cthulhu again, and so, a lot of what I've been writing recently is in the form of journal entries and such. So once more, I apologize for the emotional turmoil I'm sure to have caused by posting this sample of filth here, on the internet, where everyone can see/laugh/jeer/burn the witch and her wicked writing.

Shivari:

Novajam:

mark_n_b:

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

-snip-
when do you use its and when do you use it's (or should I say "when does one"?)
-snip-

I'd like that to be cleared up for me as well. I currently use "it's" as a shortened way of writing "it is," or when making a noun belong (eg. It picked up it's apple), however I'm not so certain that I'm using it properly.

Whenever you use it's, read it as "it is", and you'll be able to figure it out. When making something belong to "it", just use "its", as otherwise you'll be confusing it with "it is". "It" is that one exception where you don't use an apostrophe to designate possession.

The exception that proves the rule indeed. And sorry for the double post, sort of forgotten I'd let that damn story loose here.

xitel:
I have found that I do all my best writing a) without any pre-planning, and b) at 2:00 AM the day it's due.

Me too, by then logic doesn't really work, and I just kind of let it flow...

Bored Tomatoe:

xitel:
I have found that I do all my best writing a) without any pre-planning, and b) at 2:00 AM the day it's due.

Me too, by then logic doesn't really work, and I just kind of let it flow...

It's especially useful when writing poetry.

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

Where the Hell have you gone to school?

And here is something that I wrote in like, 45 minutes or something, I've been consistently writing creatively (if you can call this creative) for about a year and a half now, and I have definitely gotten better. Here's something I've decided to post, and I know it's hellacious, but keep in mind, I'm 14.

Ever feel like your eyes need to bleed a little? Step right up, mah man!

I've recently fallen deeply and foolishly in love with limited omniscient narrative perspective writing, after reading Call of Cthulhu again, and so, a lot of what I've been writing recently is in the form of journal entries and such. So once more, I apologize for the emotional turmoil I'm sure to have caused by posting this sample of filth here, on the internet, where everyone can see/laugh/jeer/burn the witch and her wicked writing.

I go to school in Washington in a place called Wenatchee. Some people are really smart, a lot of people are really stupid.
I kind of thought that you were repeating "lung" to much. But then I remembered that this was a journal entry and I cut you some slack.
I've never read an H.P. Lovecraft book, but his ideas of monsters have influenced what I put in my own writings.
I've been writing a "novel" for a while. In the first chapter, the main character, Allen, fights an enormous tentacled creature that can make you go insane just by looking at it. Allen defeats it of course but it is difficult. I don't think anyone ever won in Lovecraft's stories...

What's odd is that if I look at my papers before 4th grade, my handwriting was near perfect, then after 4th grade, it became nearly illegible-chicken-scratch. odd...

PirateKing:

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

Where the Hell have you gone to school?

And here is something that I wrote in like, 45 minutes or something, I've been consistently writing creatively (if you can call this creative) for about a year and a half now, and I have definitely gotten better. Here's something I've decided to post, and I know it's hellacious, but keep in mind, I'm 14.

Ever feel like your eyes need to bleed a little? Step right up, mah man!

I've recently fallen deeply and foolishly in love with limited omniscient narrative perspective writing, after reading Call of Cthulhu again, and so, a lot of what I've been writing recently is in the form of journal entries and such. So once more, I apologize for the emotional turmoil I'm sure to have caused by posting this sample of filth here, on the internet, where everyone can see/laugh/jeer/burn the witch and her wicked writing.

I go to school in Washington in a place called Wenatchee. Some people are really smart, a lot of people are really stupid.
I kind of thought that you were repeating "lung" to much. But then I remembered that this was a journal entry and I cut you some slack.
I've never read an H.P. Lovecraft book, but his ideas of monsters have influenced what I put in my own writings.
I've been writing a "novel" for a while. In the first chapter, the main character, Allen, fights an enormous tentacled creature that can make you go insane just by looking at it. Allen defeats it of course but it is difficult. I don't think anyone ever won in Lovecraft's stories...

I figured the same thing when I was writing it, but I sort of thought it fit (at the time, God knows that happens far too often) as an example of how everything was getting worse, and how the time to make a decision was drawing nearer. I'm glad you read the thing, I know I would not have resolve enough to read this filth again. If it's not a problem, I'd be interested in that novel, and as a response to your statement about H.P. Lovecraft, few people do win in his stories. Just curious, but what did you think of my writing?

P.S. Thank you for all that slack cutting you did, it was well appreciated.

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

Where the Hell have you gone to school?

And here is something that I wrote in like, 45 minutes or something, I've been consistently writing creatively (if you can call this creative) for about a year and a half now, and I have definitely gotten better. Here's something I've decided to post, and I know it's hellacious, but keep in mind, I'm 14.

Ever feel like your eyes need to bleed a little? Step right up, mah man!

I've recently fallen deeply and foolishly in love with limited omniscient narrative perspective writing, after reading Call of Cthulhu again, and so, a lot of what I've been writing recently is in the form of journal entries and such. So once more, I apologize for the emotional turmoil I'm sure to have caused by posting this sample of filth here, on the internet, where everyone can see/laugh/jeer/burn the witch and her wicked writing.

I go to school in Washington in a place called Wenatchee. Some people are really smart, a lot of people are really stupid.
I kind of thought that you were repeating "lung" to much. But then I remembered that this was a journal entry and I cut you some slack.
I've never read an H.P. Lovecraft book, but his ideas of monsters have influenced what I put in my own writings.
I've been writing a "novel" for a while. In the first chapter, the main character, Allen, fights an enormous tentacled creature that can make you go insane just by looking at it. Allen defeats it of course but it is difficult. I don't think anyone ever won in Lovecraft's stories...

I figured the same thing when I was writing it, but I sort of thought it fit (at the time, God knows that happens far too often) as an example of how everything was getting worse, and how the time to make a decision was drawing nearer. I'm glad you read the thing, I know I would not have resolve enough to read this filth again. If it's not a problem, I'd be interested in that novel, and as a response to your statement about H.P. Lovecraft, few people do win in his stories. Just curious, but what did you think of my writing?

P.S. Thank you for all that slack cutting you did, it was well appreciated.

Everything I've learned about Lovecraft was from hearing other people talk about it or from research on Wikipedia.
Well, I thought it was kind of depressing. And this is coming from a guy who laughed all the way through Schindler's List(not really). I like the stuff about the hands though and through that learn that he's a surgeon. I kind of found his total lack of will to live unappealing. Maybe I would grow to like him in time though. This is written from first person, so how would he know what color his lungs are? That's what I think. I took a class recently and we did stuff like this. It still hasn't worn off. We were really supposed to nitpick.
No matter how bad you think your early stuff is, it's still stepping stones toward greatness. No one sits down and decides to write the great american novel. It just happens.

I have some good stories and ideas but I suck monkey balls at writing and so does my grammar, so I've never bothered.

In the 9th grade I was taught how to write a 5 paragraph essay and now when I write anything I use that format.

I can ROLEPLAY...thats it... I can come up with GREAT SCENARIOS for things to take place in... I just can't write for every character...

PirateKing:

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

Where the Hell have you gone to school?

And here is something that I wrote in like, 45 minutes or something, I've been consistently writing creatively (if you can call this creative) for about a year and a half now, and I have definitely gotten better. Here's something I've decided to post, and I know it's hellacious, but keep in mind, I'm 14.

Ever feel like your eyes need to bleed a little? Step right up, mah man!

I've recently fallen deeply and foolishly in love with limited omniscient narrative perspective writing, after reading Call of Cthulhu again, and so, a lot of what I've been writing recently is in the form of journal entries and such. So once more, I apologize for the emotional turmoil I'm sure to have caused by posting this sample of filth here, on the internet, where everyone can see/laugh/jeer/burn the witch and her wicked writing.

I go to school in Washington in a place called Wenatchee. Some people are really smart, a lot of people are really stupid.
I kind of thought that you were repeating "lung" to much. But then I remembered that this was a journal entry and I cut you some slack.
I've never read an H.P. Lovecraft book, but his ideas of monsters have influenced what I put in my own writings.
I've been writing a "novel" for a while. In the first chapter, the main character, Allen, fights an enormous tentacled creature that can make you go insane just by looking at it. Allen defeats it of course but it is difficult. I don't think anyone ever won in Lovecraft's stories...

I figured the same thing when I was writing it, but I sort of thought it fit (at the time, God knows that happens far too often) as an example of how everything was getting worse, and how the time to make a decision was drawing nearer. I'm glad you read the thing, I know I would not have resolve enough to read this filth again. If it's not a problem, I'd be interested in that novel, and as a response to your statement about H.P. Lovecraft, few people do win in his stories. Just curious, but what did you think of my writing?

P.S. Thank you for all that slack cutting you did, it was well appreciated.

Everything I've learned about Lovecraft was from hearing other people talk about it or from research on Wikipedia.
Well, I thought it was kind of depressing. And this is coming from a guy who laughed all the way through Schindler's List(not really). I like the stuff about the hands though and through that learn that he's a surgeon. I kind of found his total lack of will to live unappealing. Maybe I would grow to like him in time though. This is written from first person, so how would he know what color his lungs are? That's what I think. I took a class recently and we did stuff like this. It still hasn't worn off. We were really supposed to nitpick.
No matter how bad you think your early stuff is, it's still stepping stones toward greatness. No one sits down and decides to write the great american novel. It just happens.

You've made quite a few good points here, and I must thank you for not sodomizing my writing as you could have. Ok, you caught me, the only possible way for the surgeon to know what his lungs are like would be X-Ray vision, and I highly doubt that that is a skill he possesses. However, in my defense, this wasn't so much the emergence of the world's next superhero as it was poor wording. I was trying to describe what his lungs felt like. Often I catch myself writing only about half an intended sentence, and I end up leaving myself with a sort of obscure kind of poem. God knows that I've done absolutely zero re-writes on this particular piece of writing. And as for the surgeon's lack of the will to live, this was supposed to be revealed with a written prescription for anti-depressants, placed after the initial writing, as it is supposed to be revealed that the surgeon (left nameless intentionally) is suffering from clinical depression, due to the fact that his 23 year old daughter had recently been diagnosed with leukemia. It was just an idea though, and I never really got around to writing it out, though I need to, as without it, the story sort of seems incomplete. I thank you once again for your time, as well as for humoring me. :)

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

Where the Hell have you gone to school?

And here is something that I wrote in like, 45 minutes or something, I've been consistently writing creatively (if you can call this creative) for about a year and a half now, and I have definitely gotten better. Here's something I've decided to post, and I know it's hellacious, but keep in mind, I'm 14.

Ever feel like your eyes need to bleed a little? Step right up, mah man!

I've recently fallen deeply and foolishly in love with limited omniscient narrative perspective writing, after reading Call of Cthulhu again, and so, a lot of what I've been writing recently is in the form of journal entries and such. So once more, I apologize for the emotional turmoil I'm sure to have caused by posting this sample of filth here, on the internet, where everyone can see/laugh/jeer/burn the witch and her wicked writing.

I go to school in Washington in a place called Wenatchee. Some people are really smart, a lot of people are really stupid.
I kind of thought that you were repeating "lung" to much. But then I remembered that this was a journal entry and I cut you some slack.
I've never read an H.P. Lovecraft book, but his ideas of monsters have influenced what I put in my own writings.
I've been writing a "novel" for a while. In the first chapter, the main character, Allen, fights an enormous tentacled creature that can make you go insane just by looking at it. Allen defeats it of course but it is difficult. I don't think anyone ever won in Lovecraft's stories...

I figured the same thing when I was writing it, but I sort of thought it fit (at the time, God knows that happens far too often) as an example of how everything was getting worse, and how the time to make a decision was drawing nearer. I'm glad you read the thing, I know I would not have resolve enough to read this filth again. If it's not a problem, I'd be interested in that novel, and as a response to your statement about H.P. Lovecraft, few people do win in his stories. Just curious, but what did you think of my writing?

P.S. Thank you for all that slack cutting you did, it was well appreciated.

Everything I've learned about Lovecraft was from hearing other people talk about it or from research on Wikipedia.
Well, I thought it was kind of depressing. And this is coming from a guy who laughed all the way through Schindler's List(not really). I like the stuff about the hands though and through that learn that he's a surgeon. I kind of found his total lack of will to live unappealing. Maybe I would grow to like him in time though. This is written from first person, so how would he know what color his lungs are? That's what I think. I took a class recently and we did stuff like this. It still hasn't worn off. We were really supposed to nitpick.
No matter how bad you think your early stuff is, it's still stepping stones toward greatness. No one sits down and decides to write the great american novel. It just happens.

You've made quite a few good points here, and I must thank you for not sodomizing my writing as you could have. Ok, you caught me, the only possible way for the surgeon to know what his lungs are like would be X-Ray vision, and I highly doubt that that is a skill he possesses. However, in my defense, this wasn't so much the emergence of the world's next superhero as it was poor wording. I was trying to describe what his lungs felt like. Often I catch myself writing only about half an intended sentence, and I end up leaving myself with a sort of obscure kind of poem. God knows that I've done absolutely zero re-writes on this particular piece of writing. And as for the surgeon's lack of the will to live, this was supposed to be revealed with a written prescription for anti-depressants, placed after the initial writing, as it is supposed to be revealed that the surgeon (left nameless intentionally) is suffering from clinical depression, due to the fact that his 23 year old daughter had recently been diagnosed with leukemia. It was just an idea though, and I never really got around to writing it out, though I need to, as without it, the story sort of seems incomplete. I thank you once again for your time, as well as for humoring me. :)

I try to be more constructive rather than mean.
Stories are kind of like fossils. You can find them buried if you look hard enough, but then you have to carefully excavate them.
That anit-depressants thing was interesting. You seem to have it all figured out. Time to do some rewrites I say.

PirateKing:

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:

Blair Bennett:

PirateKing:
In the schools I've gone to, I think I'm the only person that knows the difference between there, their and they're.
I'm like...a novelist or something. So, I try to improve my writing skill. Any lack thereof I blame on the public school system.

Where the Hell have you gone to school?

And here is something that I wrote in like, 45 minutes or something, I've been consistently writing creatively (if you can call this creative) for about a year and a half now, and I have definitely gotten better. Here's something I've decided to post, and I know it's hellacious, but keep in mind, I'm 14.

Ever feel like your eyes need to bleed a little? Step right up, mah man!

I've recently fallen deeply and foolishly in love with limited omniscient narrative perspective writing, after reading Call of Cthulhu again, and so, a lot of what I've been writing recently is in the form of journal entries and such. So once more, I apologize for the emotional turmoil I'm sure to have caused by posting this sample of filth here, on the internet, where everyone can see/laugh/jeer/burn the witch and her wicked writing.

I go to school in Washington in a place called Wenatchee. Some people are really smart, a lot of people are really stupid.
I kind of thought that you were repeating "lung" to much. But then I remembered that this was a journal entry and I cut you some slack.
I've never read an H.P. Lovecraft book, but his ideas of monsters have influenced what I put in my own writings.
I've been writing a "novel" for a while. In the first chapter, the main character, Allen, fights an enormous tentacled creature that can make you go insane just by looking at it. Allen defeats it of course but it is difficult. I don't think anyone ever won in Lovecraft's stories...

I figured the same thing when I was writing it, but I sort of thought it fit (at the time, God knows that happens far too often) as an example of how everything was getting worse, and how the time to make a decision was drawing nearer. I'm glad you read the thing, I know I would not have resolve enough to read this filth again. If it's not a problem, I'd be interested in that novel, and as a response to your statement about H.P. Lovecraft, few people do win in his stories. Just curious, but what did you think of my writing?

P.S. Thank you for all that slack cutting you did, it was well appreciated.

Everything I've learned about Lovecraft was from hearing other people talk about it or from research on Wikipedia.
Well, I thought it was kind of depressing. And this is coming from a guy who laughed all the way through Schindler's List(not really). I like the stuff about the hands though and through that learn that he's a surgeon. I kind of found his total lack of will to live unappealing. Maybe I would grow to like him in time though. This is written from first person, so how would he know what color his lungs are? That's what I think. I took a class recently and we did stuff like this. It still hasn't worn off. We were really supposed to nitpick.
No matter how bad you think your early stuff is, it's still stepping stones toward greatness. No one sits down and decides to write the great american novel. It just happens.

You've made quite a few good points here, and I must thank you for not sodomizing my writing as you could have. Ok, you caught me, the only possible way for the surgeon to know what his lungs are like would be X-Ray vision, and I highly doubt that that is a skill he possesses. However, in my defense, this wasn't so much the emergence of the world's next superhero as it was poor wording. I was trying to describe what his lungs felt like. Often I catch myself writing only about half an intended sentence, and I end up leaving myself with a sort of obscure kind of poem. God knows that I've done absolutely zero re-writes on this particular piece of writing. And as for the surgeon's lack of the will to live, this was supposed to be revealed with a written prescription for anti-depressants, placed after the initial writing, as it is supposed to be revealed that the surgeon (left nameless intentionally) is suffering from clinical depression, due to the fact that his 23 year old daughter had recently been diagnosed with leukemia. It was just an idea though, and I never really got around to writing it out, though I need to, as without it, the story sort of seems incomplete. I thank you once again for your time, as well as for humoring me. :)

I try to be more constructive rather than mean.
Stories are kind of like fossils. You can find them buried if you look hard enough, but then you have to carefully excavate them.
That anit-depressants thing was interesting. You seem to have it all figured out. Time to do some rewrites I say.

I'll get on it. :)

I've generally always been a terrible writer. Until 8th grade, where I had an amazing English teacher who got me into reading and had me develop an appreciation for language and literature. In 9th grade, my love for English came to an abrupt stop and my writing de-evolved into crap due to my corrupt English teacher.

Now, in 10th grade, I originally took regular English. It was an easy A, and I didn't need to try, I didn't care much either. However, my English teacher was absolutely wonderful and became my favorite teacher ever. She helped me improve my writing a lot, and brought out my love for English again. Lord of the Flies, the first novel we read, also brought out my love for literature again.

My English teacher saw me advance in writing and how I had a 99% for the first quarter, so half-way through second quarter she decided to try to switch me to Pre-AP English 10. Now I'm in a higher level class, and doing fairly well in it. I get A's on all my writing assignments, including the timed ones, and my only problem is grammar, which I've never grasped well.

Also, I went and looked at my old essays like you did, Shivari. My old writing was absolutely atrocious, and made me feel proud of my current writing. I've also begun to enjoy writing, and especially reading. I recently finished War and Peace by Leo Tolstoy and I'm working on Crime and Punishment by Fyodor Dostoevsky. I plan on taking AP English next year along with Creative Writing. I thank my old English teacher I had for the first part of 10th grade for all this.

Been writing since I was 12, got rid of my first angst.
Still doing it at 20.
Poetry, essays, short stories, and trying to get my longer ones done.

Here's an example. http://reioa-defoe.deviantart.com/art/Trip-88921283

My writing's improved a lot.
Looking back on my old stories, I was actually embarrassed. (I've been writing for about 7 years)
I seem to work best late at night and after reading a book. (: