The super hero Zebra Santa investigates a bank robbery, Zombie Genghis Kahn attacks Romania, and Snake hides behind a box. The pilot features all 3 main character, but future episodes will only feature 1 character at a time.
Thanks for the comments and for watching! After discovering I wasn't on the first cut list I just had to play "don't stop believing" by Journey. Heh, gotta have a little hope.
randommaster: Machinima, very cool. The dialogue's really slow, though, and it would help a lot if the lines were read with more energy.
Also toward the end you can hear a dog barking outside, and a fly buzzing around your computer, and an airplane circling your house. I noticed no one else said anything about this, and it may have gone unnoticed but I listen with headphones and it's very obvious with them. You really stood a chance for making first cut but you need to clean up the audio and work on the dialogue!
randommaster: Machinima, very cool. The dialogue's really slow, though, and it would help a lot if the lines were read with more energy.
Also toward the end you can hear a dog barking outside, and a fly buzzing around your computer, and an airplane circling your house. I noticed no one else said anything about this, and it may have gone unnoticed but I listen with headphones and it's very obvious with them. You really stood a chance for making first cut but you need to clean up the audio and work on the dialogue!
LoL those sounds were background noises from the actual little big planet level. Also if you notice when you hear the airplane the Romanian is actually looking up at the sky, which was totally by accident. I tried to lower the background sound because of the fly making the noise, but in hindsight maybe I should have just added background music.
Well that was something new. And i like machinamas. This one was pretty funny, but i have to agree that the dialogue is just a tad slow for my taste, but that's my opinion. But overall, it was nice. Also, the sombrero part was very funny. It was quite an memorable quote.
imnotparanoid: One question will you ever have a different chacter for a single episode once in a while? Or just those three?
If we did ever have a new main character we would probably make a detective character. But each character's story has a wide variety of different characters, so it might not be necessary. For instance Zebra Santa gets many different sidekicks like business casual cheshire cat because they keep dying. Except for Hepatitis C who just keeps getting injured instead of dying. Zebra Santa also has many different villains like trench coat ninja besides just Antler Monkey.
Also when Zombie Genghis Kahn takes over a country and kills it's leader he usually turns them into a zombie and has them join his zombie army as well as enlisting other mystical creatures like Dracula. Genghis also has rivals who are also trying to take over the world like the Alligator King. Genghis doesn't just take over countries in episodes. In one episode we have planned he has a strategy meeting with his zombie generals.
Solid Snake's story and character we sadly couldn't really show off because we only had 5 minutes. But in his we have Otacon talking to snake via codec, but Otacon is a lot different because of a certain life decision. We also have Snake going on missions, which are given to him by a mysterious individual. This post is way too long I'm gonna stop now.
imnotparanoid: One question will you ever have a different chacter for a single episode once in a while? Or just those three?
If we did ever have a new main character we would probably make a detective character. But each character's story has a wide variety of different characters, so it might not be necessary. For instance Zebra Santa gets many different sidekicks like business casual cheshire cat because they keep dying. Except for Hepatitis C who just keeps getting injured instead of dying. Zebra Santa also has many different villains like trench coat ninja besides just Antler Monkey.
Also when Zombie Genghis Kahn takes over a country and kills it's leader he usually turns them into a zombie and has them join his zombie army as well as enlisting other mystical creatures like Dracula. Genghis also has rivals who are also trying to take over the world like the Alligator King. Genghis doesn't just take over countries in episodes. In one episode we have planned he has a strategy meeting with his zombie generals.
Solid Snake's story and character we sadly couldn't really show off because we only had 5 minutes. But in his we have Otacon talking to snake via codec, but Otacon is a lot different because of a certain life decision. We also have Snake going on missions, which are given to him by a mysterious individual. This post is way too long I'm gonna stop now.
Hmmm, kind of a sneaky way around animating, but still pretty funny at times! I think your comedic writing could use work but the visual gags were straight on! God luck!
Reverend Del: Enjoyed this, though the voices could do with some work. A little more enthusiasm wouldn't go amiss I'm sure.
randommaster: Machinima, very cool. The dialogue's really slow, though, and it would help a lot if the lines were read with more energy.
Owlslayer: Well that was something new. And i like machinamas. This one was pretty funny, but i have to agree that the dialogue is just a tad slow for my taste, but that's my opinion. But overall, it was nice. Also, the sombrero part was very funny. It was quite an memorable quote.
I really apreciate the feedback. Can you guys tell me specifically which lines or characters could be improved? This would really improve our machinima.
Reverend Del: Enjoyed this, though the voices could do with some work. A little more enthusiasm wouldn't go amiss I'm sure.
randommaster: Machinima, very cool. The dialogue's really slow, though, and it would help a lot if the lines were read with more energy.
Owlslayer: Well that was something new. And i like machinamas. This one was pretty funny, but i have to agree that the dialogue is just a tad slow for my taste, but that's my opinion. But overall, it was nice. Also, the sombrero part was very funny. It was quite an memorable quote.
I really apreciate the feedback. Can you guys tell me specifically which lines or characters could be improved? This would really improve our machinima.
The dialogue in general has pauses when switching between speakers in addition to having slow pacing in general. Making sore that the lines are read quickly would help a lot.
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The super hero Zebra Santa investigates a bank robbery, Zombie Genghis Kahn attacks Romania, and Snake hides behind a box. The pilot features all 3 main character, but future episodes will only feature 1 character at a time.
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